Guilt

I will not try and dignify
The abuse of substance; outer stimuli
Sometimes the soul needs a jump start
To create that which is pegged as art

Really all I do is fantasize
About a better life as mine withers away
And then myself I victimize,
When I’m the only one to blame

Meandering through life I continue to stumble
Furthermore, try to project myself as decent – being humble
When in reality that which is base, is base
All that echoes are undeserved hymns of false praise

Even that is too much; it’ll actually enthuse –
My own guilt, which I had thereby tried to effuse.
A reversal, overbearing malfeasance I become engrossed;
A devastating state of depression from the world’s riposte

A new meaning to killing with kindness.

© Luis Valencia

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About luisydomonique

Poetry Year Long Project between Luis Valencia and the Brilliant, Beautiful, and Vivace Domonique Celeste Alcaraz.
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27 Responses to Guilt

  1. Jingle says:

    Meandering through life I continue to stumble
    Furthermore, try to project myself as decent – being humble
    When in reality that which is base, is base
    All that echoes are undeserved hymns of false praise….

    love the lines.
    🙂

  2. Jingle says:

    u know what to do…

    I would suggest that u scan the participant list…
    many are new,
    visiting old ones to secure friendships and get feedback,
    visit fresh ones to enjoy fresh talents…
    both are nice to have!

    I am thrilled to have you.
    love the productive mind you have!
    😉

  3. notjeffery says:

    Sometimes the soul does need a jump start.
    Your words are poignant.

    Awesome,
    Peace

  4. megzone says:

    awesome lines there 🙂
    simple beautiful 🙂

    m here from Jingle’s rally…
    you can read my rally poem at
    http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/09/09/why/

  5. dancingfreak says:

    a wonderful writing 🙂

    gosh!!! guilt can kill alright!!! 😦 no feeling can be worse than guilt 😦

    but no feeling can teach us a better lesson than guilt 😀

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  8. Chris G. says:

    Like the rhyme scheme you’ve got going on through the first, third, and fourth stanzas–and they give way to some truly stupendous lines.

    “A reversal, overbearing malfeasance I become engrossed;
    A devastating state of depression from the world’s riposte” ~Fantastic! And a striking message to boot.

  9. Guilt…it’s vicious. Your poem captures the guilty dance so well.

    I use my poetry as a way to survive that part of myself, the part that is eaten with guilt, the part that has use substance as jump start to the soul…Your poem really resonates with my own creative process!

    so, I appreciate you and your willingness to share more than I can express!

  10. How well you capture the human condition!

  11. awesome lines for sure.. and the second verse is very deep too..!

    mine for the rally is ~here~

  12. frayedges says:

    What a great portrayal of addiction. You worded this so nicely and it kept me mesmerized.

  13. This line is a powerhouse of a statement:

    All that echoes are undeserved hymns of false praise

    –LOVED this, great work!

  14. Jingle says:

    lovely participation,
    I see you in places…

    Happy Thursday!

  15. woih says:

    Oh wow..that’s opened and honest!

    I saw alot of myself in these lines.Thank you

  16. buttercup600 says:

    Very poignant and simply a wonderful poem. x

  17. Madison says:

    I adore this. Such beautiful images! Killing with kindness!

  18. Someone Is Special says:

    Lovely Lines… So cool…

    Happy Rally…

    Sweet Dish

    –Someone Is Special–

  19. revbillcook says:

    An interesting poem struggling with struggle. I look forward to reading more of your explorations and poetry. – bill

    and just in case you haven’t heard, jingle is starting another opportunity to share what we write and to read what others are doing. If you are interested, here is the link: http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/jingle-poetry-open-house-party-welcome.html

  20. 83October says:

    I enjoyed reading this poem. The subject matter is interesting in its depiction of guilt and how it eats us up. But more than that I like the rhyme scheme and the syllable distribution. I’m not 100% sure if you intended that syllable count to be similar for the first and second stanza, as well as that of the third and fourth, but it was a pleasure to find that in your poem.
    I initially read it as is, noting the rhyme scheme. However, the way each line had some sort of cadence made me look into syllable count. I can only hope i counted it right.
    Great poem.

  21. A.B. Thomas says:

    Such a delightful read – I love the way the words swirl as you read them, thanks!

  22. Alethea says:

    very powerful….sometimes the soul does need a jump start!!

  23. dcwright02 says:

    Really all I do is fantasize
    About a better life as mine withers away
    And then myself I victimize,
    When I’m the only one to blame

    this stanza is so true to so many hearts. i think we’ve all been in that downward, self destructive spiral. and there is no one to blame but oneself… such a great poem!

    check out mine if your interested!
    http://lifeloveandmisery.wordpress.com/2010/09/12/collapse/

  24. kyoichi says:

    if only the words didnt hit so hard.

    still, nice in a thoughtful day =]

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